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Sincerely, Your Summer Girl

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I am your summer girl,
burnt your heart to a char without even trying..

I noticed all the love I have for you,
&
I gave warning,
told you to leave,
because I became scared of you turning my heart to
ice,
& the high possibility that
I will melt your soul,
and blacken your heart with the fire inside of mine..

Still,
you keep coming back into my mind, and
vision.

I cannot deny the one I love when both hearts are destroyed for the other.

So, I wrap you in my arms,
my kiss,
and warmth.
I hope for an equilibrium between the sun and ice,
hope that you want us to find comfort within eachothers grasp once more.

Hope that we can keep eachother...

Alive.
....

SSL

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Do you think this flows well?
Did I end it to quickly or to late?
Do you understand the concept of "summer girls" from this?
Can you relate to this piece at all?
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Kaz-D's avatar
:star::star::star::star::star: Overall
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:star::star::star::star::star: Originality
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:star::star::star::star::star: Impact

The first line really drew me in and took me back to summer days and colours. I like how you've set this out, the flow is not constant, but that doesn't matter here as the words just seem to compliment each other perfectly. The concept is great, although a little saddening, but it's nice to see a love story from a different perspective, there's so much written out there that's positive and perfect, the everyday flaws that we don't acknowledge are never picked up on. This speaks to me of a love that can't be avoided, even though really it should...and that's very romantic. Great writing <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="15" height="15" alt=":)" title=":) (Smile) - :)"/>